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Tobiloba's avatar

Hmm 🤔 Verse 3

I like how the verse 3 reflects about life, how it reflects on the idea that life is short and that we must make the most of the time we have.

Most importantly, I like how it narrows it down to a call for social and political change🥺

Here is my 4 lines poems, I hope y’all like like it;

‘Life is fleeting, time moves fast

Don't let it slip away, make it last

Seize every moment, make it count

before it's gone, and can't be found’.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

This is a great poem that hit's the arrow point, and It can yet be transformed for improvement.

Take this for consideration.

"Life is fleeting, time is the ship.

Don't hit the iceberg like a titanic.

Keep sailing with care and surveillance.

Put each moment in a piggy bank"

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Faruq Sosanya's avatar

Seize your moment hmm nice 🧐🤔

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Franklin Oladipo's avatar

Okay I like the end of verse 3 😹 I didn't see that coming 🤣🤣.

My four line poem:

What is life?

Great minds have often wondered.

What is life?

I will leave out the question and just enjoy it's wonder.

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Ogunbannjo Emmanuel's avatar

Just as expected amazing and mind blowing as always leaving the readers with a great satisfactory feeling of enlightenment,

The third verse is mesmerizing

My lines

What is life

It's like an inescapable question

Some look back at their answers with satisfaction

Some with regret for not taking it serious

And Some look towards it with fear.

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Emmanuel Salako's avatar

Wawuuu....this is awesome

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

Yes, grandiose is the word.

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John Akintade's avatar

The sky is a canvas, a work of art

A masterpiece painted by the heart

Of the creator, so grand and free

A beauty that's meant for you and me.

That’s mine

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

This is great poem. I like it. Well done,

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Folorunso Michael's avatar

I don't regret readings this at all!

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

I'm glad this platform is engaging you postively. I'm still expecting your try for a four-line of poem. No worries if it sounds simple, I can you improve it (See my reply on the top comment for example)

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Sodiq Atiku's avatar

I was truly moved by your poem. The imagery and emotion you convey are truly beautiful

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

I'm glad this platform is engaging you positively. I'm still expecting your try for a four-line of poem. No worries if it sounds simple, I can you improve it (See my reply on the top comment for example)

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Ajewole Allison's avatar

This is delightful to read.

I'm not a writer but would like to give it a try.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

I'm glad this platform is engaging you positively. I'm still expecting your try for a four-line of poem. No worries if it sounds simple, I can you improve it (See my reply on the top comment for example)

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