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Tobiloba's avatar

Hmm 🤔 Verse 3

I like how the verse 3 reflects about life, how it reflects on the idea that life is short and that we must make the most of the time we have.

Most importantly, I like how it narrows it down to a call for social and political change🥺

Here is my 4 lines poems, I hope y’all like like it;

‘Life is fleeting, time moves fast

Don't let it slip away, make it last

Seize every moment, make it count

before it's gone, and can't be found’.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

This is a great poem that hit's the arrow point, and It can yet be transformed for improvement.

Take this for consideration.

"Life is fleeting, time is the ship.

Don't hit the iceberg like a titanic.

Keep sailing with care and surveillance.

Put each moment in a piggy bank"

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Faruq Sosanya's avatar

Seize your moment hmm nice 🧐🤔

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