Ah! This is brilliant poem 🎉, I like how you started with stream of creativity, circling around and take a paddle. It all makes sense.🌊 And the mocking storm is rare, making it a +1. Then, ending it with a line that fits with the main two verse closed the argument of any question if you are good writer. 🚀
Thank you, Tobi. Writing was my first love, but I drifted. Your prompt was a lure I couldn't resist. I'm hoping this nudges me further to write, again.
Babafemi, you've written an impressive piece. I like the route you went "mentors" and I fully understood the picture, because I can relate to once being a fish and corals.
The rest of the lines coming after imagine was a soothing feel to complement the above ones, and lastly ending it with calm properly ties it with the first and second main verses.
This is a quality poem and stainless cleaned. I like how you added: hold on, and the part of dawn. Just maybe the ending part was too direct and need a revisit.
This is an interesting read. New highs and lows, suggesting challenges. Peace and ease rhymes as well as down and round. Well done stirring your own creativity on this one. Great work
This is a round and shining pot of a verse ✨. I like how you started with technology and called it back to nature. And ended it well to fit the two main verses. This is absolutely fantastic and impressive. 🎉
Thanks for this creative flow of poem. It is beautifully written and I can relate to it. Also, thanks for liking the previous comments and posts. I see them, and shall be in touch soon.
New streams of creativity
Flowing and circling around
Take a paddle, dare to move
An idea held up against the mocking storm
Remember ---
Your dream is the gentle wind you need
To set sail the canoe of your life
Sailing joyously
Through the calm shores of hope
Ah! This is brilliant poem 🎉, I like how you started with stream of creativity, circling around and take a paddle. It all makes sense.🌊 And the mocking storm is rare, making it a +1. Then, ending it with a line that fits with the main two verse closed the argument of any question if you are good writer. 🚀
Thank you, Tobi. Writing was my first love, but I drifted. Your prompt was a lure I couldn't resist. I'm hoping this nudges me further to write, again.
Hahaha, I'm glad you're writing again!
Clean...
Thank you, Babafemi.
New sharks,
those that bare teeth at the growth you show
the 'mentors' that feed on fishes and corals
You want to go fast, yet only if they had a little moral
Imagine....
The bobbling of the canoe and the splash of the clear pit below
and look ahead with hope so pure till you get a steady flow
as the light seeps through the misty clouds above
and you remember the beauty you beheld
when you took the first wade in the sea called life
See the calm...
Babafemi, you've written an impressive piece. I like the route you went "mentors" and I fully understood the picture, because I can relate to once being a fish and corals.
The rest of the lines coming after imagine was a soothing feel to complement the above ones, and lastly ending it with calm properly ties it with the first and second main verses.
Thank you for your comment.
I stopped writing about 15yrs ago, saw your piece and got a 'leap' in me, like Elizabeth :)
Thank you for the inspiration sir.
Wow, so good to know! You write beautifully well.
New discoveries,
New ways of thinking,
Hold on, New things are always on the horizon,
The world will continue to spin, constantly in motion,
Sprouting out new things with every revolution.
With every dawn, a new day begins,
A chance to explore and break new spins.
Start each day as a new canvas, let your prints be known.
This is a quality poem and stainless cleaned. I like how you added: hold on, and the part of dawn. Just maybe the ending part was too direct and need a revisit.
"Start each day as a new canvas, let your prints be known" - This is elite.
New visions, would yours be next? i do not know,
As the mysteries unfold, you begin to shine like snow,
bursting forth with a lightening glow,
so try again, hit the rock, give it one more blow.
for in doubt, failure casts its bounds,
echos of fear like a resounding hound,
but do it afraid, even with them trembling hands,
for soon you gon wake up to an ovation band!
This is a great write up, and I enjoyed the first line. However, please correct me, but it seems there was a mix of your idea and A.I.
thanks, na no A.I, all of it is mine, writing like this is very close to composing lyrics for me
Then, that's a fabulous piece of poem. 🥳 The lines are well written, and adding a pidgin to the last line brought some twist.
Well done !!! 🚀
The world is rotating and moving so fast and slow,
New ideas,
New businesses,
New highs, new lows.
I just want to be at peace,
But that might mean I need to slow down,
The calm waves put me at ease,
Only if this feeling went round.
This is an interesting read. New highs and lows, suggesting challenges. Peace and ease rhymes as well as down and round. Well done stirring your own creativity on this one. Great work
New poems...
To tether a gen-Z...
Hooked on slangs, mono-syllables and short codes...
What a new type of poem it is! 🎸 It comes from what is called a song-poem. I enjoyed reading it, thank you 🥳
New Technology,
Endless opportunities and possibilities,
Everyone always chasing one or the other,
Forgetting to pause to take a moment,
A moment to reflect,
A moment to soak in nature,
A moment to listen to the birds chirping,
A moment to listen to the loud sound of the waves of the oceans.
Loud yet soothing.
A moment of nature.
A moment of calm.
This is a round and shining pot of a verse ✨. I like how you started with technology and called it back to nature. And ended it well to fit the two main verses. This is absolutely fantastic and impressive. 🎉
New innovations each day,
That birth creativity to make the world calm yet stormy.
calm yet stormy! This is a good finish, although you can improve it by aiming for at least 5 lines.
The world is rotating and moving so fast and slow,
New ideas,
New businesses,
Newer versions of all that is,
And still could be;
How beautiful the calm,
Before the storm,
And even more beautiful,
The calm after the storm,
Be still,
And live as beautifully as you can.
Thanks for this creative flow of poem. It is beautifully written and I can relate to it. Also, thanks for liking the previous comments and posts. I see them, and shall be in touch soon.
Thank you for the kind words Tobi! I also look forward to your feedback!