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Michael Uzor's avatar

New streams of creativity

Flowing and circling around

Take a paddle, dare to move

An idea held up against the mocking storm

Remember ---

Your dream is the gentle wind you need

To set sail the canoe of your life

Sailing joyously

Through the calm shores of hope

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

Ah! This is brilliant poem 🎉, I like how you started with stream of creativity, circling around and take a paddle. It all makes sense.🌊 And the mocking storm is rare, making it a +1. Then, ending it with a line that fits with the main two verse closed the argument of any question if you are good writer. 🚀

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Michael Uzor's avatar

Thank you, Tobi. Writing was my first love, but I drifted. Your prompt was a lure I couldn't resist. I'm hoping this nudges me further to write, again.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

Hahaha, I'm glad you're writing again!

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Babafemi Ajakaiye's avatar

Clean...

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Michael Uzor's avatar

Thank you, Babafemi.

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Babafemi Ajakaiye's avatar

New sharks,

those that bare teeth at the growth you show

the 'mentors' that feed on fishes and corals

You want to go fast, yet only if they had a little moral

Imagine....

The bobbling of the canoe and the splash of the clear pit below

and look ahead with hope so pure till you get a steady flow

as the light seeps through the misty clouds above

and you remember the beauty you beheld

when you took the first wade in the sea called life

See the calm...

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

Babafemi, you've written an impressive piece. I like the route you went "mentors" and I fully understood the picture, because I can relate to once being a fish and corals.

The rest of the lines coming after imagine was a soothing feel to complement the above ones, and lastly ending it with calm properly ties it with the first and second main verses.

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Babafemi Ajakaiye's avatar

Thank you for your comment.

I stopped writing about 15yrs ago, saw your piece and got a 'leap' in me, like Elizabeth :)

Thank you for the inspiration sir.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

Wow, so good to know! You write beautifully well.

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Tobiloba's avatar

New discoveries,

New ways of thinking,

Hold on, New things are always on the horizon,

The world will continue to spin, constantly in motion,

Sprouting out new things with every revolution.

With every dawn, a new day begins,

A chance to explore and break new spins.

Start each day as a new canvas, let your prints be known.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

This is a quality poem and stainless cleaned. I like how you added: hold on, and the part of dawn. Just maybe the ending part was too direct and need a revisit.

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Binary Logs by Fouad's avatar

"Start each day as a new canvas, let your prints be known" - This is elite.

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AP's avatar

New visions, would yours be next? i do not know,

As the mysteries unfold, you begin to shine like snow,

bursting forth with a lightening glow,

so try again, hit the rock, give it one more blow.

for in doubt, failure casts its bounds,

echos of fear like a resounding hound,

but do it afraid, even with them trembling hands,

for soon you gon wake up to an ovation band!

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

This is a great write up, and I enjoyed the first line. However, please correct me, but it seems there was a mix of your idea and A.I.

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AP's avatar

thanks, na no A.I, all of it is mine, writing like this is very close to composing lyrics for me

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

Then, that's a fabulous piece of poem. 🥳 The lines are well written, and adding a pidgin to the last line brought some twist.

Well done !!! 🚀

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Binary Logs by Fouad's avatar

The world is rotating and moving so fast and slow,

New ideas,

New businesses,

New highs, new lows.

I just want to be at peace,

But that might mean I need to slow down,

The calm waves put me at ease,

Only if this feeling went round.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

This is an interesting read. New highs and lows, suggesting challenges. Peace and ease rhymes as well as down and round. Well done stirring your own creativity on this one. Great work

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Oke Epia's avatar

New poems...

To tether a gen-Z...

Hooked on slangs, mono-syllables and short codes...

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

What a new type of poem it is! 🎸 It comes from what is called a song-poem. I enjoyed reading it, thank you 🥳

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Mopelola Hussein's avatar

New Technology,

Endless opportunities and possibilities,

Everyone always chasing one or the other,

Forgetting to pause to take a moment,

A moment to reflect,

A moment to soak in nature,

A moment to listen to the birds chirping,

A moment to listen to the loud sound of the waves of the oceans.

Loud yet soothing.

A moment of nature.

A moment of calm.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

This is a round and shining pot of a verse ✨. I like how you started with technology and called it back to nature. And ended it well to fit the two main verses. This is absolutely fantastic and impressive. 🎉

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Oluwafisayo Obasa's avatar

New innovations each day,

That birth creativity to make the world calm yet stormy.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

calm yet stormy! This is a good finish, although you can improve it by aiming for at least 5 lines.

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Oganga Mangiti's avatar

The world is rotating and moving so fast and slow,

New ideas,

New businesses,

Newer versions of all that is,

And still could be;

How beautiful the calm,

Before the storm,

And even more beautiful,

The calm after the storm,

Be still,

And live as beautifully as you can.

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Tobi Akinpelu's avatar

Thanks for this creative flow of poem. It is beautifully written and I can relate to it. Also, thanks for liking the previous comments and posts. I see them, and shall be in touch soon.

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Oganga Mangiti's avatar

Thank you for the kind words Tobi! I also look forward to your feedback!

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