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Jan 7, 2023·edited Jan 7, 2023Liked by Tobi Akinpelu

I liked the first stanza. It was captivating. It made me drop my phone, to think for a while and pick it up again to continue reading the rest of the poem.

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Wow, really?

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Jan 7, 2023Liked by Tobi Akinpelu

Yeahh

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Jan 7, 2023·edited Jan 7, 2023Liked by Tobi Akinpelu

The opening lines really caught my attention!

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Fantastic!

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Jan 8, 2023Liked by Tobi Akinpelu

I love the 3rd stanza.

And i got caught up in the last line that says "we're looking for help but in fact it help that really looking for us😲.

It made me realize that every little action makes a change.

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This is fascinating.

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Jan 7, 2023Liked by Tobi Akinpelu

"When it dies where does it go"..

Mind opening line 🔥 piece

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Yes! Thank you.

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Jan 7, 2023Liked by Tobi Akinpelu

The description of the marriage of confidence and articulation is the highlight for me: "That you thought you were the one looking for help, when it is help that is looking for you".

What a nice piece!!

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Thank you for your variety of words and for taking the time to read and engage with my poem.

I'm glad that you found the description of the marriage of confidence and articulation to be a highlight.

It's always rewarding to know that my writing has resonated with someone.

Thank you for your comment and for sharing your thoughts with me.

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Jan 9, 2023Liked by Tobi Akinpelu

I felt touched by the third poem which says “That you thought you were the one looking for help, when it is help that is looking for you.” Reason – I think deeply and thoughtfully I found out that a lot of people just like you took upon them the spirit of help to help others.

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Eborume, that you wrote this: Planet Saturn ought to prostrate to you.

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Jan 7, 2023Liked by Tobi Akinpelu

Verse 2 is more than it seems🔥🔥…. I had to read and read over it again before I could get hold of it. This is what I was able to derive from the verse

“That success requires a combination of persistence, attentiveness, patients, (The ambulance is experiencing Lagos traffic...), and trust in oneself and one's abilities.

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Flesh did not reveal this to you.

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